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This is a picture of our brain storm of things that we short we should change the reason we did this was because we are doing our inquiry on change makers.

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Zoos

The reason we have Zoos is so that people can see different animals all in the same place from all around the world and people also come from different country to see different animals that they can't see from there country.

The problem with keeping animals in a cage with painted surrounding is that it is the same thing every day is that they get stressed and when they're stressed their lifespan is shortened this is called zoochosis. Zoochosis, apparently derived from psychosis, is mental illness in caged animals.

If you put yourself in the animals point of view you don't want to be forced into a cage.You would have to see lots and lots of children and parents all day long it would be exhausting. In the wild there would be none of that.

Some think that if we take away zoos there will be no prophet but I think that it is worth the money to tack away zoos and to stop animal cruelty and put them back into the wild.

In conclusion I think that we should take away zoos and stop animal cruelty.

 

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The reason we have Zoos is so that people can see different animals all in the same place from all around the world and people also come from different country to see different animals that they can't see from there country.

The problem with keeping animals in a cage with painted surrounding is that it is the same thing every day is that they get stressed and when they're stressed their lifespan is shortened this is called zoochosis. Zoochosis, apparently derived from psychosis, is mental illness in caged animals.

If you put yourself in the animals point of view you don't want to be forced into a cage.You would have to see lots and lots of children and parents all day long it would be exhausting. In the wild there would be none of that.

Some think that if we take away zoos there will be no prophet but I think that it is worth the money to tack away zoos and to stop animal cruelty and put them back into the wild.

In conclusion I think that we should take away zoos and stop animal cruelty.

 

Commonwealth Games

Commonwealth Games

I think that the reason that we should keep the Commonwealth Games is so that the smaller countries can have a chance to win things because in the Olympics all the smaller countries get pushed to the side.In they Olympics all the big countries win everything.The Commonwealth Games give the smaller countries a chance.If you take away the games there will be noting left.We have to keep the Commonwealth Games.

When the little children are watching t.v. after a long day at school it inspires them to go out and set goals.After that they can strive for those goals and then may be in the same place as the people on the t.v. when he was younger.If there were no games that little boy/girls dreams would be crushed. Do you really want that to happen?

Some people think that we should stop they Commonwealth Games because it costs to much for they gear and they athletes to go everywhere and get new gear.If They have sponsors they could donate gear and pay for their trips and all that kind of thing.Some think that we should stop the games because we already have the Olympics but in the olympic all the big countries win so the Commonwealth Games are just practice for went the olympics come.

In conclusion I think that we should keep the commonwealth games because it is practical and a lot of fun.

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